The Perils of Over-sharing in Social Networks
In the article “The Perils of Over-sharing in Social Networks”, Emm (2014) talks about the
ever increasing danger of using the internet. As ever-bigger routine activities have to rely
on the Internet today, people begin to feel apprehensive for the authorities and the large
companies to spy on their personal lives. However, the author believes that the really dangers
are hidden behind the numerous seemingly irrelevant information that we choose to put
online, which can can be used by some concealed audiences to attack not only ourselves but
also our companies. He indicates that this threats are easily to be ignored due to the fake
sense of safety of users. The author also lists some useful security advices to readers.
When I first read this article, I started to wonder what is over-sharing? With this question, I read some articles online and found out that most people would like to consider over-sharing as broadcasting too much personal information on social media. In this blurry definition, there are two main terms that could reflect peoples feeling. One is the quantity of information while they other is the extend of intimacy.
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evaluation of/response to the ideas in the article?
- Main idea of the reader's respond is unclear.
7. Does the writer (of the reader response) focus well on a specific aspect of the
article?
- Focus of the response is rather unclear. Writer did not mention what is her point of agrument
8. Is there a clear stand (or thesis) regarding some specific area of the original
article?
- There are stand regarding specific areas in the original article. But the stand is not very clear
12. Do you consider this an interesting reader response?
- Can be more interesting
13. Are all outside sources correctly documented?
- No
Organization:
1) Is the writer’s thesis appropriate in relation to the summary?
- Thesis is unclear
3) Does the transition sentence/paragraph between the summary and the
response seem well connected to/cohesive with both?
- It is not well connected as the thesis is not clear
Language Use:
1. Is the language in the summary clear?
- A few grammar mistake.like
" due to the fake sense of safety of users"
2. Is the language in the rest of the essay clear?
- A few unclear sentences such as
". People may be soon drifted apart from their friends". Should be " People may soon drift apart from their friends"
3. Is the thesis clearly articulated?
-Thesis is unclear
6. Are there any paragraphs that seem unclear to you? (list them by number)
- paragraph 2. The intention of the writer of the RR unclear.
By Teckyi, Ye Chen, Chee Hou
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